Author: Lia Juri

( Note:I am just here to help you to improve. If I hurt your feelings in anyway at all I'm deeply sorry.)

Title: 4/5
The first time I read your title it straight away caught my attention. It was catchy but up until now I couldn't find any connection to your story but it only has 2 chapters so It's all righty. ;P

Overall Appearance: 3/10
The reason why I gave you a three out of a ten is because, you din't request for a poster or a background. At least you did some editing and you din't use much colors. You should always request a poster first before requesting a review. It'll save you marks.

Forewords: 3/10
Your forewords isn't exactly a foreword. It's like an author's note. I think you should edit it and state the summary and the characters information. Remember not to state too much down because it'll give your whole story away and your readers can easily predict what's going to happen next.

Plot: 10/15
Your plot is reality...Somehow it's common a little bit, but I don't think it'll be too common since it happened to you. Right?  It's interesting from the beginning though I have to say , some parts were common. Love is the same both ways either in reality or the opposite of it so I can't really blame you for the whole common thing.

Creativity/Originality: 11/15
It's your own life experience about love. As I said before love is the same whether in reality or the opposite of it so I don't know how to grade you on this. It must be original since it's about you. Creative, I'm not so sure.

Flow: 9/10
Your flow was perfect to me. It wasn't dragging your story down like a snail or did it went to fast.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocab: 8/10
Your mistakes are very common. Just to remind you, I must be a capital letter. Sometimes you did put I in a capital letter but after that you din't. Placing and in the beginning of a sentence is called improper english. Many do the same and even in books but it's really not proper. Nothing wrong with your spelling.

Characterization: 6/10
I think you could describe a little more about uhmm your personality  in the story. Maybe you should write about....your personality a little more detailed.

Writing Style:10/10
Nothing wrong with your writing style.

Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
Overall I really enjoyed reading your story!
;D

Sub Total: 68

Bonus: 5/5
 
Total: 73.

Hope I din't hurt your feelings in anyway. If I did I just want to say that I din't intend too.