Note: Sorry for the loooooong wait!
Author: Alqemy.
Note: If I hurt your feelings in anyway I'm deeply sorry. I'm just trying to help you. )
Review.....
Title: 3/5
I don't think it's a good idea to put two sentences for a title. It gives out two different meanings. One good and one bad but I'm not saying it's bad. I kinda like it myself. Your title is so not common. It's catchy but not.
Overall Appearance: 3/10
A poster and BG might have helped you to earn more marks. It's plain but I still gave you a three since you din't use much colors. You only focused on green? The text was easy to read. It wasn't too bright. Just a tip, request for a poster first. ;D
Forewords: 5/10
I think you should've described about the characetrs. The summary was a little too much but it caught my attention when I first read the forewords.Remember to describe about the characetrs. It'll earn you more marks.
Plot: 12/15
Your plot is not common. It can't always be found on winglin but I have saw it in a movie somewhere. Overall your plot is really interesting. If I have time I'll definately read your fanfic!
Creativity/Originality: 12/15
Some parts of your story is similiar to the movie I saw. Even though you might not copied it but I still have to deduct marks. To me, it is original. Can't be found on winglin that much. Uhmm not common and a little creative. There's some twists in it.
Flow: 8/10
Your flow to me was partly fast but mainly perfect. Maybe to other reviewers or to your readers it was all perfect but I'm kinda slow. LOL.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocab/ 14/15
Don't have to worry about that. There's totally nothing wrong with it. Only a few mistakes here and there. Very few though.
Characterizatization: 8/10
I think you could describe a little bit more about the main character's personality. You din't describe much about the other characetrs other than the main one. Good thing.
Writing Style: 10/10
Eh, nothing wrong.
Overall Enjoyment: 3/5
Totally enjoyed reading your ff. If only I was interested with all the characetrs in your story.
Sub Total: 78
Bonus: 5/5
Grand Total: 83.
Thank you for requesting at Lurve-Sick!!!
